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Since the beginning, there are elements that really stand out:
- flute motif (I'm not sure it is a flute, but it is what I hear
after the compression) in Chorus accompanying the melody;
- guitar part;
- vocals adding accent to every first beat.
The "flute" melody is noticeable. It is an exotic nuance
of the main melody in Chorus, and a very well performed idea! When
combined with the guitar, the sound adds a folk/jazz color, which
fits adequately the overall sonority.
The guitar part is characteristic of the style and expands the
rhythmic movement of the funky beat. Good work!
Since the song structure and arrangement are rather simple, it
is Chorus and Verse, there's a need for some ingredient that will
make the track more appealing dynamically. On this purpose, some
features can be easily changed, others added or subtracted:
- The "flute" is OK on Chorus, but during the Verse its
part could be different. Instead of repeating the vocal melody there,
it could simply play some notes of the harmony, or alternatively,
switch part with the first beat vocal ("woah" voice).
That would bring a new color to the sound.
- The above accented beat vocal, ("woah"), is not needed
during the Verse! It is ear-catching on Chorus, but it can be even
more characteristic if used only there. This way the dynamic strength
of the Chorus will further increase.
- The drums section is basically on target, but you'd better off
simplify some parts. That is: simplify the breaks that occur between
some 8 measure blocks. The way they are now reminds a rock rhythm,
but it isn't a rock song.
Also, the Chorus is composed of four 8 measure phrases that are
almost identical. For some reason the drums in the middle 2 phrases
differ slightly from the first and the forth ones. The Ride Bell
or Cymbal is not the best choice there - because of its sound, part,
and position. Actually that part is not needed. Keep the rhythm
clear and concise and the song will adhere even more strongly to
the style!
Overall, there are good ideas and thoughts. However, for a radiofriendly/commercial
sound, better recording is definitely needed. Working in a studio
would help the performance also. The emotional intensity combined
with the precision of execution, which can be achieved in a recording
room, will further increase the song's mass appeal.
Keep up the good work, and Good Luck!
Anton Tontchev
for MSSVision.com 03/08/2004
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