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- The Intro and Verse are OK, they are perfect the way they are;
- The instrumental part right after the first Verse - what is this?
It sounds nice, but you don't need it unless you add something really
particular here.
But I don't think it will help your song in some way.
Want to make sure it's a winner Song since the beginning? Put the
Chorus there, rigth after the Intro. Or at least a part of it -
"I'm Fallen" - the way it goes at the end of the track.
And a strong dynamic effect would be if you keep the guitars (distortion)
out of it (here only). No need to repeat it twice (again, here).
- The Chorus - actually it IS very good. Excellent hook - "I'm
Fallen".
And you could make it even more powerful - try adding a second
voice.
- I'm Not sure about the "bridge" between your 1st
Chorus and the verse.
I'm Not saying it is bad, but some how it's distracting me.
Maybe shortening it will be a solution of compromise.
Think about that - both, your Verse and Chorus are very strong
and are composed of two parts. So, is the "bridge"
really needed the way it is now?!
Anyway, Verse and Chorus are really powerful and the hook is memorable
- DON'T FEAR REPEATING YOUR HOOK - it's your winning "weapon"!
Again - excellent work, Compliments!
Good Luck,
Anton Tontchev
for MSSVision.com - 04/09/2003
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