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Well, what follows is the:
Bridge
Pre Chorus
Chorus.............
WHY?
You really don't need all of them. You've got a very nice and pleasant
intro and Verse. Make a stronger Chorus and the result is - A
WINNING SONG!
Instead your song structure makes you loose the initially presented
brightness. Why? Is this happening because you first have written
the Lyrics and then added the music trying to fit the lyrics length?
Another thing:
The Pre Chorus is stronger than your Chorus. That happens because
of the pause. Use that pause right before the Chorus.
Also the rhythm is "slowing down" on Chorus. You shouldn't
do this. You could use it as a dynamic effect on the Bridge or when
you repeat the Verse.
Overall:
This Song is composed of 4 different Parts which are very well written
and performed, but they should be parts of 2 or 3 songs, not one.
To make this track Radio Ready, you can choose between:
1. Creating a Chorus for the Verse;
2. Write a different Verse for the Chorus.
Anyway you have to put the Bridge after the Chorus or even later.
Intro, Coda and Verse are just FINE! Make the Chorus a part of
this Song and we all will love it!
Anton Tontchev
for MSSVision.com 03/20/2002
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