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1. The intro (it introduces the theme which is repeated thru the
song), is too long. All the things that happen before the guitar
sound should come earlier.
2. The part with the guitar - it's in the right place, but more
things should have happened before it. For example the bass...
3. Yes, the bass. Very well used. It gives that flavor... well,
the one that we've missed in the first part. Why don't you use it
in the beginning? It will make the entire picture complete and give
satisfaction to the listener's ears.
4. So, here (after the part with the bass) something different is
needed in order to keep the attention and the good mood.
Maybe a voice (even only talking) will add that little extra needed
for the completion of the entire sound picture (you are using a
voice like sound, so a vocal here will not be extraneous).
5. Of course using better "sound machine" will help further
the track.
And.., you could spend some extra time of creating your own (modifying)
drum set instead of the usual 808(?). (it's hard to make midi sound
like real instruments, but why not exaggerate and make it even more
synthetic!).
The way I would see this track is:
- A Shorter intro - up to 15 sec.
- Keeping up the theme (evolving it) and using all the instruments
(bass especially) - a more "static" bass would be fine.
- The guitar sound part - it is OK, but lift up the volume and let
it go smoothly in to the next part.
- Wow - the part with the nice, improvisation like bass - keep it
the way it is.
- now see the above 4 lines ; and
- no changes are needed for the end - it plays just fine
Night Lines is a good title and... well, it says it all.
You (the listener) really get that late night feeling of relaxation
and calm.
And this is an excellent point for you (the composer) - achieving
what the
title says and the reason you wrote the track...lines :)!
Good Luck,
Anton Tontchev
for MSSVision.com - 04/02/2003
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